My production attempt

Here is a recent spot for one of the sponsors of the bluegrass show that I am the engineer for that I recorded. What I am saying is a written script and this is a dry read that I will add music and voice processing to before airing. I post it here for all you pros out there to give it a critiquing and enhancement (if you want to).

Good job!  All in all I think it sounds pretty good.  It sounds like what I am trying to tackle myself-Lazy tongue.  I have the exact same problem, not able to pronunciate a few words.  The ones that stood out to me were "busy", technical, internet, dialup, etc.  Now, I lived in Norfolk for a year so I know the NC, south VA accent and that maybe what I am hearing.  Take it with what you will-Poopsie

Thanks Poopsie. Yeah as hard as I try I cannot get the southern out of me (I've lived here in eastern NC all my life). One part of the script was sort of long and even though I read it several times it still "tougne ties" me because its a lot to say, but it is the bulk of the spot. I guess it is poorly written (I didn't write it). I guess I could re-write it. Again thanks!