Critique please: KayDee - Original (remix) First Draft

Okay this is my remix of a song that some recording artist friends of mine had moderate success with...IF YOU HAVE ANY CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM FOR THIS PLEASE VOICE IT, I WILL DEFINITELY TAKE NOTE OF IT FOR THE NEXT MIX SESSION, I JUST ASK THAT YOU PLEASE BE AS SPECIFIC AS POSSIBLE, E.G. IF THERE IS A PROBLEM WITH THE WAY A WORD SOUNDS, WHAT IS THE PROBLEM WITH IT AND HOW MIGHT I GO ABOUT IMPROVING THAT...thank you in advance, I'm just interested in making greater music and I trust your ears. (sidenote: if you could focus your attention on any aural anomalies that would be extra helpful.)



THIS IS MY SONG:
KayDee - Original (remix)


BTW here is the predecessor for comparison:

Dynasty and Laws - Original

I like the vocal backings panned left and right - they're cool.  I don't think there's much wrong with it, but if I was gonna tweak it at all, I'd try adding just a touch of bottom to it, cuz I think it would improve it.  Try it.